Prison is the best way punishment. Do you agree or disagree?

#prison #punishment

Prison

can never be

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best way to punish.If you have to discipline someone and you decide to do it

through

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other

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way,it can be accepted.being confined to a particular

place

would not totally work in all cases to show you do not agree with a

partcular

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particular

act.

Firstly

, some

people

require patience to deal with them,they are temperamental and emotional.,o if you have to take them to a room called

cell

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,trust me,you would never get the best of them.

People

this

needs

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to be monitored.Taking

such

people

to a confined

place

would never bring a change in them.

Secondly

people

deserve

second

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chance.

Prison

can be as good as saying,

this

person has been totally written off.No one is perfect,so

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believe everyone deserves a

second

chance,an

offender

can be taken to another

place

where he or she would

would

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be denied

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normal privileges,

this

still gives a beam of hope to the

offender

.By the time an

offender

is deprived of privileges,

this

brings a sober reflection which creates the

desire

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change in heart of the

offender

. A saying goes; loneliness kills fast than

disease

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the disease

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.Whether you agree or not,

this

appears to be true,a

prison

is a

place

where there are no

people

with whom one can easily relate,which means

this

person

whom

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was suppose

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to change would eventually become lonely,as time goes on

this

can lead to depression,

this

can lead to death.I believe one can discipline without making it lead to death. Going

further

,we see in movies that a lot of

attrocities

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atrocities

are

commited

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committed

in the

prison

yard,rapes,smoking of weeds and various substances,even killings surprisingly.So,why would you make it worse for the person if you plan to just punish by making him or her go to

prison

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