Some people think that with combined effort on the part of the government and society, crime can be completely eradicated, while others argue that this is completely hypothetical and that crime has always been present in societies even in ancient times. Compare these two views. Which do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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two sides
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people
think about
crime
. Some
people
say that if the
government
and society cooperated together to prevent
crime
such
use
education
and take more kindness to others so there totally will be no
crime
at all.
However
, others believe that it is just a wish.We cannot achieve
this
gold no matter how hard we are working on it.
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the
second
point of
people
's thought and I am going to explant why. There are several factors that show
crime
cannot be completely eradicated by the
government
and social effort.
First
of all, from ancient to now the nation and parents try to provide better
education
and well upbringing for adults and children to prevent them become a criminal, while
this
seems have not been worked yet, because nowadays the criminal still around the world and the crimes happen still every day appear.
For instance
, in a wealthier country like America, the
government
provide the best
education
to every citizen,the communities and the organizations are supporting the poverty
people
. Unfortunately, the
crime
that happens over there is one of the worst places.
Therefore
, no matter how hard the
government
and community try to decrease the
crime
it is impossible.
Moreover
, become a criminal is a personal decision and no matter what level of
education
and how wealthy they are, because there are still some factors like greediness and anger that make them cross the legal line.
For example
, there is a lot of business CEO, professors and even police officers,because they are greed and try to get more money or power
then
cross the legal line,
such
being bribes.
As a result
, they being in the prison.
In addition
, recent research points out that many criminals do
crime
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crimes
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affected by
emotion
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emotions
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such
anger
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and when
people
become angry they make the wrong action
such
as harm other
people
's life. Sadly, we cannot control a person's emotion at all, so the
crime
is still around. In conclusion, the combined effort from the
government
and the community might help decrease the
crime
rate.
However
, it cannot be completely eradicated by their effort.
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