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Some educationalist think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at schools. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent days,all the educational programs have adapted to the trend of international immersion during the course period.The idea of
students
 visiting the international campuses is indeed an advantage in terms of exposure and personality building.
Firstly
, it's definitely beneficial for the
children
 in their teenage to visit and meet the
children
 with similar interests.
This
 enables them to know the culture,habits of the new country .
Furthermore
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 it is
also
 a change in geography which paves way for the
children
 to develop their personalities. They
also
 get exposed to learning a new language in the international program. Yet another persistent point is that the
students
 learn the importance of networking at an early age.It is a great opportunity for the
students
 to have worldwide networks. Even though there are a lot of pros to the international exchange there are few pitfalls as well. The fee for
such
 kinds of courses are costly and not all
children
 can afford the same.
However
, the institutions provide scholarship programs so that the opportunity becomes affordable for all the
children
 irrespective of their financial background.The institutions
also
 support by paying for the accommodation of the
students
 till the course is completed.
This
also
 helps the
students
 to overcome the difficulty of doing a part-time job to pay the expenses. To conclude,the international visits during their studies adds a lot of value to their education and invoke them to think and live independently.Even if there are few downsides like high fees, there are always perks like scholarships and payment of accommodation fees, which helps to overcome
such
 downsides and enable all
students
 to take up the program.
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