Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There is an argument about a group of
people
who believe that the modern world
is more dependent on the other, while the other
Correct pronoun usage
others
believe
that we have become more independent than before. The following paragraph will discuss both opinions. Change the verb form
believes
Therefore
, the conclusion has been reached.
On the one hand, those people
who believe that the modern world
is more dependent on other people
more than in the previous period might have a conclusion that in the modern world
. There are many things that we need support from the other to fulfil our desire. For example
, to fix our car and we are not comprehending in this
fields, we need the mechanics to fix it for us.
On the other hand
, those who believe that the modern world
has become more independent have an idea that in the modern era, we can be anything that we want even in the field that we do not comprehend. Due to the fact that in the modern world
the technologies have become easier to use than in the past. For example
, the mobile phone has played a crucial role in our daily life, to connect and bring people
closer than before. So, this
makes people
have become more independent than before.
In summary, I strongly agree with those who believe that the modern world
has become more independent. Because the technologies in this
era are easier to use than the previous era. And I believe that the futuristic world
will become more independent than the modern world
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