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briefly explain the work place Ethical behaviour with the example

#work #place #behaviour
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 in my carrier path. We informed
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to
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immediate supervisor and told him that she rejected the complaint raised by us. And
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, we beg him to consider her job and advice only for
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 time as
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first
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 supervisor had asked
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 incident from her, and she rejected the complaint. So, the supervisor decided to check the CCTV
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 to clarify the case. After telling that to our friend she accepted the complaint and told him that she stole two thousand rupees from that customer. Boss was given a lecture to her by indicating the importance of company ethics and consequences with arise of violating those.
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