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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?

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In recent years,it's been noticed that most nations want to live in the main downtown.Apparently,those who live in big ports have to overcome many issues in day-to-day life.In my opinion,the government authorities should promote the public to move back to their native towns. There are lots of headaches, population are facing in the large municipality.
First
 and foremost is safety and security.Admittedly, city people don't have enough time to keep a good relationship with others,not even with their neighbours.
Therefore
,if any emergencies occur there won't be anyone to help them.There is a high chance of robberies, not only at the night but
also
 in the daytime.The
next
 issue is the traffic problems .In peak times,the road traffic will be heavy in cities,
as a result
 ,folks normally losing their precious time every day.
In addition
 to
this
,there are pollution issues.Due to more vehicles and modern lifestyles, pollution increases day by day especially, in main centres.To illustrate
this
, a recent article published in the Times of India, stated that, compared with regional towns, the main cities pollution is almost 50 times higher,and it still increasing. The above-mentioned troubles can be solved,if the authorities take proper action by sending the crowd back to their original
places
.The government can encourage the community by offering some good benefits to them.
Firstly
, by developing a good transport system, as well as, loan facilities for settling down to their own
places
.
Secondly
,developing the rural health and education system.Because,most of the villagers shifted to major
places
 due to better education,job and treatment facilities only.If they get these all in their own town they won't be going to the main capital. To conclude,safety and security for human being and their own properties are the main obstacles which city society are facing nowadays.If the government departments take some proper actions,
hence
 public can settle back to their own
places
 for a better quality of life.
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