A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible disadvantages
Hello Aslı,
I am writing to share my thoughts about a camping holiday you have asked me. I believe my past experience makes me an expert on holiday camping, and I want to say that you will have enjoyable times , particularly in being alone in the forest and meeting new friends.
On the other hand
, dealing with non-domesticated animals and cold weather might be challenging for you Linking Words
initially
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time I went camping, I encountered a bear, and the weather was extremely cold. Linking Words
Consequently
, I decided to seek refuge in a hotel close to the camping zone.
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year, pending approval from my boss. If he grants permission, I would love to join you. Linking Words
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, I may need to stay in Samsun.
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I await your positive feedback, I would be grateful if you could reply to my letter after your incredible camping experience.
If you have any questions or thoughts, please do not hesitate to contact me.
Kind regards,
Salih ZekiLinking Words
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea. While there is an attempt to organize ideas, some paragraphs contained multiple unrelated points which can cause confusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
While the greeting and closing are appropriate, strive for a more robust structure within the main body of the letter to guide the reader through your points.
Task Achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task fully. The disadvantages mentioned were brief and require further explanation and development to meet the task response criteria adequately.
Task Achievement
Maintain a consistent and suitable tone throughout the letter. While the tone is generally appropriate, there were instances of informality that could be perceived as too casual for the task.