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In some countries, a few people can earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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One of the conspicuous trends of today’s modern world is a colossal upsurge in the
income
 of some individuals Whereas some
people
 believe that the governments should put a capping on their
income
 if while others believe that it's good for the nation's progress.For a country’s regular economic progress inflow of cash is mandatory.
To begin
 with,salaries and cash flow are some of the most debatable and controversial topics.There is a deluge of arguments in favour of my stance .The most preponderance is that an increased amount of financial resources within a certain group of
people
 could lead to financial inequality or disparity in lifestyle.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the Indian Institute of Technology,Ranchi,reveals that in developing nations like India where there is a scarcity of health resources to lower section of society on other hand big corporations are spending their
income
 on luxurious lifestyle so governments should intervene and put some sanctions.
Secondly
,most
people
 living in the slums don’t have access to clean drinking water and healthcare.So,both the public and private organisations should come forward to take cumulative initiatives which stand for the betterment of society.
Moreover
,stringent implementation of rules and regulations should be done so that these large corporations don’t exploit the public .
For example
 , a survey conducted in the Jharkhand state by independent NGOs revealed that the maximum amount of mica used in various cosmetics brands has been extracted by migrant labourers from the mica mines but these
people
 don’t have access to education and healthcare as these are living below the poverty line .
Moreover
,most of the population living in
this
 region is illiterate . In a nutshell, in my opinion,government organisations should come forward to implement rules for the individuals falling under higher
income
 bracket should come forward to help the population living under undesirable conditions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealth inequality
  • economic growth
  • motivation
  • talent acquisition
  • consumer spending
  • tax revenue
  • redistributing wealth
  • market forces
  • income disparity
  • social stability
  • freedom of choice
  • meritocracy
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