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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantage of young people who decide to do this.

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In certain countries, in the middle of a high
school
 and
in
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 the beginning of
a
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college
, teenagers are advised to either work or travel.
This
 essay will state the benefits and drawbacks of working or travelling by students after secondary
school
 and before initiating their
college
. By either working or travelling prior to
college
 help students understand their future goal but
on the
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 most of the companies do not hand over the project to them rather keep them under shadow which does not give in-depth knowledge of any assignment. One commonly cited advantage of having industrial experience
post high
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school
 is that youngsters get to have a glimpse of the working of a company.
Furthermore
, they can logically decide their future goal based on their practical knowledge which can be achieved in any organisation rather than the theoretical knowledge obtained from
school
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.
For example
, an undergraduate might wants to become an engineer but is unable to cope up with the competitive environment of the organisation might rethink
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his decisions prior
selecting
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 any major in his
college
 and
this
 is possible only after he has experienced working in any firm.
Moreover
, by travelling to different places and by being away from their families, young people get to shoulder their responsibilities which helps them to inculcate many worldly traits which are required in long run. Despite
this
, there are multiple cons
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 working after high
school
. One of them is that companies do not
handover
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 the working projects to the teenagers and keep them under
shadow
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 of someone and
hence
 freshers do not get a chance to work with the clients and a relevant experience cannot be gained. In conclusion, as a coin has two sides
similarly
 there are both merits and demerits and of being employed succeeding high
school
.
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  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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