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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is clear that the excess weight problem is relevant right now, because the number of overweight
people
 will not stop growing, and we have to do something with that.
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 of
people
 think that more physical education lessons are the best solution for
this
 problem.
Although
 implementing more PE classes to school curriculum sounds crucial since it helps to promote sports to
people
 and make it more popular, we should watch at a country
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 we are trying to find a solution to
this
 problem
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. To illustrate, plenty of schools in Russia have compulsory PE classes twice or three times a week but it does not do any good because the only thing students are doing is that they are given a ball and told to play with it. I strongly believe that overweight
people
 should just go to the gym if they want to be healthy and fit in their wedding suit, that they bought just two years ago. And I know few
people
, that won their excess weight using just
this
 method, and now they look literally like greek gods in their best ages. In conclusion, as I said, physical education lessons are not the worst idea, but we should watch
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 a country that we are trying to save from
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 strongly believe that going to the gym is way better than just doing nothing
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 physical education lessons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity rates
  • health care system
  • physical education
  • instill
  • long term
  • raise awareness
  • healthier lifestyle choices
  • nutritional education
  • active transport
  • quality of instruction
  • facilities and equipment
  • diet control initiatives
  • community sports programs
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