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Nowadays there are many online courses offered by universities. Do you think that the advantages of online learning outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that preferences toward online courses have been mounted by universities. I reckon there are equal numbers of pros and cons
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 online learning. On the one hand,
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 could bring some positives.
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, online learning introduces more time management capabilities. As there is no need for commuting to colleges, both lecturers and students could participate in classes from their
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 without wasting a day in traffic jams.
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, web technologies allow pupils to record and share discussed subjects with each other.
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 brings more flexibility
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 the
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 process.
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, an absentee who missed the class will not be worried
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 due to the availability of materials during the semester or even more.
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, because physical limitations are omitted in
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 of remote
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, field diversity has grown up. Participants are no longer anxious about course capacities and their selection would be based on their desires.
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, I believe that its negatives cannot be neglected. Eye contact is a key factor in the learning process. A Professor could easily understand the quality of a subject comprehension as he sees the students’ gestures. The asked questions and the following answers
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 would appear the level of understanding in a
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, delivering academic lessons is only one aspect of universities. There are a big number of soft skills which are taught through social interaction.
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, a student may learn how to solve a math problem in an online class, but he merely would be prepared for
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 communications just via the net.
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, the outcoming of in campus
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 is more because students are more concentrated while they are in physical classes in comparison to
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one
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. In conclusion, I believe that both types of
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 have their own merits. They cannot take each other’s place. Maybe the best policy is to keep both of them and benefit from their advantages.
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