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APPLICATION LETTER TOPIC . You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant’s manager. In your letter, – explain that you would like to apply for the job – give some details of any relevant experience that you have – specify the days and times that would suit you

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Dear Manager, I am writing
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 letter to apply for a job. Recently, I visited the
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 and saw the poster that you are looking for a food service worker. Your establishment is just 5 minutes away from my house which is one of the reasons for my application.
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, I am a student, so
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 work will help me to meet my financial needs as well.
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, the restaurant timings are pretty good which
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 find suitable with my schedule. Since I am applying for
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 position, I wanted to let you know that the previous work
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 did was
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 how to open and close the store.
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, on the hiring poster you mentioned that you need someone for weekends, that will be a plus point for me as well, since
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 need to attend classes on weekdays. I am looking forward to hearing from you and hope that I will meet your requirements. Yours sincerely, Raghav Sharma.

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task achievement
Try to provide specific details about your relevant experience, such as the name of the previous restaurant or the duration of your employment, to strengthen your application.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure clarity by separating your ideas into distinct paragraphs focusing on one main point each. This will improve readability and help convey your message more effectively.
task achievement
The letter effectively communicates your interest in the position and your availability, which is crucial for a job application.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriately formal and polite, which is suitable for a job application.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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