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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is a common belief that
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secondary school have suitable perceptivities to learn foreign languages.
However
, there is a more persuasive opinion that children should study
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non-native languages
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 earlier period. Discuss both of
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process
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 would illustrate the opinions. On one side of the argument, secondary
students
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pendagogical
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pedagogical
 environments. Their abilities to adapt
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knowledge
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 from school subjects and reflect them to their daily
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lives
life
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 are considerable.
Then
, those
students
 could have strong memories which are bonded with their activities. Base on my perspective,
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first
 learnt English when
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 was in grade 6th,
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 encountered a whole new ball. Thanks to my early logical thinking,
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 had learnt
this
 language rapidly and joined the English gifted team for the province competitions.
Nevertheless
, it seems
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 that children should study
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 foreign language at their primary school.
Students
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this
 period often absorb general linguistic stronger than older generations, especially, the
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 tongue.
Additionally
, their deep memories
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such
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 verbal
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 play a vital
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 in accessing
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reliable vocabularies or
grammars
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. For
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,
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goverment
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government
 had put English as a major subject in
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compulsory primary education. They stated that those student's quick adaptive learning would have improved
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 communication skills. To summarize, it is clear that the advantages of learning
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 language at
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 early stage outweigh their drawback.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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