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Band 5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read every thing they want online without paying To what extent do you agree or disagree in this statement?

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On the heated
issues
Fix the agreement mistake
issue

It seems that issues may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 is no one will spend money on printed posters or materials because they will be available to peruse everything that
need
Change the verb form
needs

The plural verb need does not appear to agree with the singular subject everything. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 online and they do not have to pay.
On the contrary
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, some pupils may think that reading
Add an article
a note
the note

The noun phrase note seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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note
Fix the agreement mistake
notes

It seems that note may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 from
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that article use may be incorrect here.

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papers is more
advantages
Replace the word
advantageous

The word advantages doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 than electronic materials. From my perspective, I strongly agree with
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 statement. It is generally accepted that nowadays peruse on the newspapers is not disturb the eyes and it is good for children who
has
Change the verb form
have

The verb has does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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 to study in the schools.
That is
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 maybe true but, if students have to
learning
Change the verb form
learn

The to-infinitive that follows the verb have requires the base form. Change learning to the base form.

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 on a website, they should use the internet to help they are learning. To illustrate, Tom wants to peruse a science note and science material is quite expensive,
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 he does not have money enough to buy it so, he has to read online.
Moreover
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, electronic newspapers
is
Change the verb form
are

The singular verb is does not appear to agree with the plural subject newspapers. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 not
waste
Correct article usage
a waste

It seems that article use may be incorrect here.

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 of money to paying for many books. It is generally acknowledged that some readers
are need
Change the verb form
need

It appears that the form of the verb need does not work with are in this sentence.

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 to be comfortable to move their treatises to go outside but the proposes
are need
Change the verb form
need

It appears that the form of the verb need does not work with are in this sentence.

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 to have space enough to keep it when the readers go outside.
For example
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, electronic posters are
in
Change preposition
on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 a phone or tablet so, an adult can open
it
Correct pronoun usage
them

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

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 to read anytime.
Nevertheless
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, individuals will have more things to study which is not just in the letters treatises . All in all, in recent years, electronic treatises is important to researching and it makes
individual
Fix the agreement mistake
individuals

It seems that individual may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 acknowledged to study online because there are a lot of majors and subjects that
necessary
Add a missing verb
are necessary

It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.

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 and interesting to looking for. From my point of view, I believe that perusing some proposes is many advantage ways.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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