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University is the only way to success. Do you agree?

#university #success
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For the most part, pursuing a
university
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 bachelor appears as the exclusive route to accomplish life's goals.
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 studying at
university
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 will give you new
knowledge
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 and
experience
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, it is not the only way to succeed.
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, I cannot entirely agree with
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 notion.
University
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 is not the only educational environment where
people
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 can acquire
knowledge
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 and
experience
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. We can ultimately learn by self-study through books, newspapers, online learning,
people
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 with more
knowledge
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 and
experience
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. Study anytime, anywhere. Many famous
people
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 like Bills Gate, Sheldon Adelson, Lawrence Ellison become successful millionaires without a college degree. In fact, many successful
people
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 do not have a college degree while the same person who has a good
university
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 degree or valedictorian but is unemployed and unsuccessful. Whether in college or not, to succeed,
people
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 must have
knowledge
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 and
experience
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.
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 the most considerable baggage that helps one have enough
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 and skills to handle the job, not necessarily in
university
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. No
university
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 trains great
people
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, but everywhere teaches you to work hard.
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, it opens up another path to success for the learner as long as consistent with ultimate goals.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multifaceted
  • foundation
  • specialized knowledge
  • critical thinking
  • pivotal
  • online learning platforms
  • vocational training
  • flexible
  • accessible
  • real-world experience
  • networking
  • entrepreneurial ventures
  • prohibitive
  • personal fulfillment
  • contribution
  • continuous learning
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