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Writing Samples
Band 7

You missed an appointment. Write a letter explaining what hap- pened. In your letter include: * what the appointment was 
 * a apology for missing the appointment 
 * a request to reschedule.

Dear Mr. Hasemi I am writing a letter in order to explain my absence from the immigration interview. I sincerely apologize for the inconvenience, I am sure I caused the interviewer and others in your office. In fact, I was unable to sleep adequately
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 the stress of the interview from which coming to your office, I had badly crashed with a truck and fainted, and
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 when I regained consciousness, I noticed the fact that I missed the appointment and my immigration documentation. Regrettably, the doctors informed me that my legs were broken and I had to be under observation for 2 months. I,
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, acknowledge that it is a great application, with regard to my condition I was wondering if it be possible to arrange a new appointment for some time 3 months later, not only I will get well but
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, I able to re-gather my evidence. I have supplied my home and e-mail addresses
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 my mobile phone number for your convenience. Your assistance in
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 matter is greatly appreciated. Yours sincerely, Mohammadreza Hadavi

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coherence and cohesion
Your letter needs a clearer structure. Try to separate your ideas into different paragraphs. One for the introduction, one for the explanation, and one for the request.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are too long and a bit confusing. Try to keep your sentences simpler and shorter for better understanding.
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Make sure to clearly communicate your feelings in a polite manner. Always include a proper closing statement to make your letter more formal.
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You clearly explained the reasons for missing the appointment and provided details about your situation.
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Your apology shows consideration for the reader's feelings. This is important in letter writing.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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