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In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays, people store knowledge on the internet. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #books #store #internet #development
Knowledge is an important thing for
life
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the life
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 of
human
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a human
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 to do everything and vigilant storage help us to maintain it for
next
 generations. In my opinion,
cumulate
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 grasp on the
Internet
 is better than
keep
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 it in books. The
Internet
 basically has advantages to access various perspectives.
First
 and foremost, carrying a book is always
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more inconvenience
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inconvenience
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 than surfing
web
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the web
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 for information.
Moreover
, the appearance of
smartphone
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smartphones
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 promotes people to interact with more aspects of society and books are restricted.
Secondly
, the world is in
globalization
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 trend and
Internet
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the Internet
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 makes people gathering and the news is upgrading minutes to minute, we just have to click on
search
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the search
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 tool to locate the citation we are looking for.
Thirdly
, the price to buy a book seems cheaper but actually, in the long term, the way to own an electronic device
help
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 people save time and
also
 money as we are able to invest something not a bookshelf or moving expenses to go to
bookstore
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the bookstore
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.
On the other hand
, the dismissal of printing can create negative effects
as a result
 of modernization. The problem of copyright
issue
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issues
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 is increasing in the past few years. When the copy button is more popular,
illegal
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an illegal
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 activity for profiteering can steal
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the gray
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gray
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 matter of others.
Also
, the quality of information
isn’t control
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isn’t controlled
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 tightly and affects
Internet
 users by misunderstanding the accuracy. In conclusion,
although
 the usefulness of
Internet
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the Internet
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 is indisputable for keeping and providing resources of human society, we ought to conserve the development of paper
book
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books
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 to minimize the negative side of the
Internet
.
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