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Some people say that Government should break down all the historic buildings and replace them with modern buildings. Do you agree or disagree?

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The given line graph dileanetes the information about the total figure of the residents who deployed the three major railway systems to travel within the United nation between 1950 to 2004/05 and the units are measured in millions. Overall,it is readily apparent that over the given years,the majority of the citizen commuted through the national
rail
 network and London underground with a notable fluctuation throughout the years.Meanwhile, the light
rail
 and metro systems despite having the least commuters it experienced a marginal rise in the
last
 few years. To provide
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 explanation of the data, in 1995,10,000
million
 civilians in England had utilised the national
rail
 network with the highest figure followed by London underground path with approximately 720
million
 passengers.
Furthermore
,the number of national railway users rose with an abrupt peak within a decade with roughly 110million which was lead by a gradual plunge,reaching the lowest point at just about 600milloin customers.
Subsequently
,after 1980,it portrayed an erratic inclination till 2004/05 with additional about 200
million
 commuters compared to its starting usages.
Similarly
, in spite of having around 300million figure difference between the national railway and London underground,the later commuters' digit displayed a significant surge with multiple fluctuations ending at just under 1000
million
 passengers at the end.
On the other hand
,the light
rail
 and metro were inception between 1960 to 1970,which noted constant figures for almost two decades.
However
,in 1980,there was a steady rise in the number hitting the highest passenger with below 250
million
.The least favoured transportation system by Britain over the given periods.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invaluable assets
  • tangible connection
  • architectural heritage
  • modernization
  • energy efficiency
  • adaptive reuse
  • historical significance
  • economic implications
  • sustainable
  • green technologies
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