Online shopping is significantly increasing. What effect does this have on people, what are the demerits and what are the job opportunities?

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year when a lot of

people

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sit at home, online shopping has increased. So now there is a question about how it affects and will affect

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's lives and what are the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping. Online shopping as any other business has advantages and disadvantages.

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hand,

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of the best advantages of online

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,they have a variety of goods, fast comparing prices and no more crowded stores. And

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, especially nowadays when we have social distance, online

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are the best idea.

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it is easier as you can see all items on your mobile phone or laptop without any effort. But

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, usual

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of the hardest times in

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period.

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customers, destroyed items and losted jobs workers are

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part of

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difficulties of developing online

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. The bright side of

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is that there are increasing job opportunities.

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, online

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are

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of the best places to work for IT- specialists, because a growing amount of buyers need a good website to work. These sites need to develop day by day so

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with computer skills can always find a job.

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delivery men will always be in demand, which is good for

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who are students or illiterate

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. To sum up, as mentioned online

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made everybody's life easier in all aspects and all types of markets but it has shown that it is

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of the steps in the digital era of humanity.

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Online shopping is significantly increasing. What effect does this have on people, what are the demerits and what are the job opportunities?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In some places old age is valued, while in other culture youth is considered more importance. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying medicines and treatments by themselves instead of visiting their usual doctors. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Attending a live performance (for example, a play, a concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?