Many city centers these days have traffic flow problems, causing congestion and pollution. One solution is to build fast ring roads on the outskirts of a city, taking traffic away from the centre. While this is helpful in some ways, it also causes new problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Traffic congestion and pollution have become major concerns in many urban
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. Some people believe that constructing fast ring
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on the outskirts can ease these problems by redirecting vehicles away from city
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I agree that
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measure has certain benefits, I
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believe it can create serious environmental and social drawbacks. One of the main advantages of building ring
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is the reduction of inner-city traffic. By providing an alternative route for heavy vehicles and long-distance commuters, ring
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help to decrease congestion in central areas.
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, public transport and emergency services can operate more efficiently.
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, after the construction of the M25 ring road around London, average travel times within the city decreased, and air quality improved slightly.
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infrastructure can bring short-term relief to urban mobility.
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,
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approach can
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lead to negative consequences.
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, ring
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often encourage car dependency, as people find it easier to drive longer distances
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of using public transport.
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not only increases carbon emissions but
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contributes to urban sprawl, as new housing and commercial areas develop along these
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, building large highways usually requires clearing green spaces and displacing residents, which can harm both the environment and local communities.
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the measure seems practical, it is not sustainable in the long run. In conclusion, constructing ring
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can temporarily reduce congestion in city
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, but it
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promotes car use and damages the environment. I
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partly agree with
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idea, but I believe that governments should
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invest in improving public transportation and promoting eco-friendly alternatives.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic
  • congestion
  • city
  • centre
  • outskirts
  • ring road
  • bypass
  • divert
  • reduce
  • ease
  • travel time
  • journey
  • commute
  • pollution
  • air
  • noise
  • safety
  • benefit
  • drawback
  • problem
  • cost
  • fund
  • build
  • plan
  • design
  • construct
  • maintain
  • manage
  • transport
  • public transport
  • bus
  • train
  • car
  • truck
  • heavy vehicle
  • cycl ing
  • pedestrian
  • policy
  • scheme
  • impact
  • long-term
  • short-term
  • evaluate
  • measure
  • toll
  • charge
  • lane
  • junction
  • connect
  • access
  • green space
  • quality
  • standard
  • equity
  • environmental
  • economic
  • social
  • online
  • integration
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