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Government should spend more money on education than recreation and sports. Do you agree or disagree.

#government #money #education #recreation #sports
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In
this
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 contemporary era, it is believed by a few that the system should allocate funds to education rather than on recreational and sports activities. In my opinion, the
government
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 approach is in the right direction, because
literacy
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 plays an important role to build the character of individuals. I strongly agree with
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 notion and I shall articulate some agreement points in forthcoming paragraphs.
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 with, character building is the basic foundation of a country. Not only does it assist in the strong economic growth of the nation but
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 aids in forming a safe society. Because of the high
literacy
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 rate, people are becoming more and more aware of the benefits of a healthy community.
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, in an article published in "The Hindu" on September 10, 2020, Kerala has been ranked as the topmost state on
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 statistics. As a consequence, we saw a very less number of covid cases as people were educated who understood the importance of social distancing.
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, I would urge the
government
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 to allocate more education funds for states as well.
On the other hand
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, the states which were spending maximum money on recreational and sports activities are lacking on
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 graph, because of which students are least interested in taking classes and
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, unable to complete their necessary qualification, which results in unemployment.
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, the crime rate has been increasing at a very fast pace since 2019 in Haryana. To conclude, in my view, the
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 should be more focused on spending on studies
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 of flushing the money on recreational and sports activities.
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, the
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 should make appropriate legislation
that is
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 mainly targeted at education for all.
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