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Many believe that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#city #life #countryside
Opinions are divided as to whether dwelling in
a
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capital is more advantageous than in an outskirt. In my opinion, I strongly agree that those who reside in a
city
 would gain more benefits for many reasons. In today’s world, It is undeniable that an increase
of
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 urbanization has significant reasons.
Firstly
, technological advancement has allowed
people
 to make commuting more convenient for either commuting workers or travelling to school.
This
 is because of the fact that effective public transports have been emerging tremendously
such
 as buses,taxis or even
skytrains
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strains
.
Secondly
, there are uncountable cases of countryside residents choosing to settle their
life
 in a big
city
 due to not only the higher job opportunities but
also
 the higher educational opportunities for their children.
For example
, many rural parents opted to
further
 their career prospects by going to a capital where they were offered more perks and facilities.
However
, it does not mean that there are no disadvantages of
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 in urban areas. It is known that more populations, more rocketing of house prices and other basic needs of lives. While living in the countryside, everyone can be sufficient with their local
life
.
For instance
, in rural provinces in Thailand, individuals have their own farmlands and rice fields for existing or financial purposes.
Thus
 residents would be able to cultivate, harvest and eat these crops without paying exorbitant prices when eating out like
people
 in
urbans
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urban
turbans
.
Accordingly
, fewer congestion of population in an outskirt can allow peaceful
life
 to villages. Due to the excessive traffic jams and pollution in a big
city
 can let
people
 feel more frustrated and angry undoubtedly. In conclusion,
although
 there are some benefits of residing in an outskirt, I believe that
city
 residents can earn lots of advantages more than rural
people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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