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In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that it is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today many believe think that
,
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 mankind can stay in other
satellite
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 in the mere future.
However
,others opine that the
budegting
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budgeting
 on other
planets
 is wasting time and energy. In my opinion,
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 disagree with the statement that human beings are meant to live on any other satellites, as it can be
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an environment
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environment
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 hazard.
First
 and foremost,
survival
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the survival
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 rate
living
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of living
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in
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on
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other
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another planet
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planet
 can be
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a danger
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danger
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 because of health and safety reasons.
Such
 as,oxygen levels
are always fluctuated
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 in other satellites.
However
, temperature rising up and down depends on the atmosphere
which
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 we are living as
this
 can be
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harmful for humans.
Secondly
, living beings who are born and brought up on the
earth
 cannot survive in another space because of the various natural resources.
For instance
, air, water and food are three energy supplements for every being.
Moreover
,there is a scarcity of these energy sources and
population
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 cannot exist
in
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 any other
planet
.
Finally
,environmental disasters occur if no humans are not living on the
planet
 because
earth
 is the space where most species
who
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eat,
breath
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 and sleep.
Furthermore
,by
chance
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 if there is another
planet
 in the future but existence rate of
man
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men
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 and women will
be low
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below
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.
On the other hand
,many scientists are discovering and satellites to
another
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another planet
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planets
 to identify whether
human
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a human
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 can live their life other than the
earth
.
For example
,NASA has made scientific
research
 on sending rockets and planes.
Moreover
,many astronauts spend their time
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the
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investigation
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 on different
planets
.
Such
 as
,
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Moon and mars.
Secondly
,
this
research
 and developments are increasing every year to know the facts of different
planets
.
For instance
, existence rate,climatic conditions are suitable for
population
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the population
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 to survive.
Thirdly
, they are proven facts that
the
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NASA has made
research
 and development and landed on
the
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mars. In conclusion, I believe that humans are meant to live on the
earth
 because we have
relationship
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a relationship
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 with the soil of the
earth
.
However
,if they are any
research
 upon living on other spaceships,
this
 may occur natural disaster.
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