Science is advanced so fast that it can now make it possible for people to live 100 years or even 200 years. Some people think it is beneficial, while others think it will cause problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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of advancement in science is very fast, which
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enable
people
to live
upto
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up to
200
years
. Certain
people
believe that it is benevolent for mankind,
however
, others argue that it can create several issues in
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society. In
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will
discusss
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discuss
both views and support my ideas for the former view. On the one hand,
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advocate that it is advantageous for
humanbeing
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human beings
human being
who are intelligent can
live
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prolong
life
and give benefit
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the nation and citizens.
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, Albert Einstein and Sir Isaac Newton, if
they
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had lived for
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longer time, the promotion of the physics sector could have been boomed.
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many saints and motivators live for 200
years
and the positivity and harmony would have never been ended ,and no world war would have been
occured
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occurred
.
Thus
,
boom
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the boom
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in science provided an opportunity to increase
thier
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their
the
life
span.
On the other hand
, growth in
scintific
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scientific
technique that has
also
improved
life
span of individuals who are involved in wrong work
such
as criminals, kidnappers, thieves and many other negative thinkers as well.
Furthermore
, by these
inventions
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many negativity can grow in society.
This
has provided a chance to those whose intention is to harm others, envy ,take revenge and promote negativity will be increased.
For instance
,if
people
who
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bad intention can live for 200
years
, they can be dangerous for other persons as well as for the nations for
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period of time. In conclusion, in my opinion, it is one of the best scientific
improvement
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improvements
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that let
people
live for many
years
of their desired
life
and
intelligent
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the intelligent
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group could give many inventions and
improvement
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improvements
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for the world.
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