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More and more couples are deciding to be "child-free", to have no children, in other words. Some people claim that those couples reach this conclusion through entirely selfish reasons. While others think that they came to this decision through noble motives, such as concern about overpopulation and desire for independence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The decision to have no
children
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 is a matter of great concern for
couples
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 nowadays. While some people oppose
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 idea due to selfish reasons, I strongly support its benefits. The merits, demerits of having no
children
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 and my perspective will be discussed as follows. On the one hand, the kids-free option of many
couples
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 is approved for several reasons.
Firstly
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,
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 choice contributes to limiting overpopulation explosion worldwide. Definitely, deciding on no
new-born
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children
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 leads to the reduction of the
amount
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 of infants,
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 it slows down global population growth.
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, those are the accurate decisions if
couples
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 have insufficient ability regardings both finances and physical health
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 Kids need to be invested substantial money and time
on
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 education, entertainment or health,
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, adults who have limited finance, unable to get the best conditions to raise
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. For
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 reason,
children
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 may be disadvantaged in the future because of these careless preparations.
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, the preference’s drawbacks make it difficult for
couples
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 to decide to have no
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. Population
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 is obviously the main impediment of
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 option. In the
next
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 decades, it reduces the number of young people which contribute to the shortage of the labour force.
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, their government is hardly able to solve those problems.
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, no time to give birth and raise a child enables no kids
couples
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 to have much time for themself and particularly their work. It seems to be considered
couples
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’ personal selfishness.
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, in recent years, because of focusing on the working of Japanese
couples
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 rather than taking care of a child, their government has faced a severe deficiency of workers in many factories. Those drawbacks support me to believe that
couples
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' choice about
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children
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 is mature thoughtless. In conclusion, the above-mentioned drawbacks seem to me that
couples
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 should have at least one child.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • voluntary childlessness
  • socio-economic factors
  • sustainable lifestyle
  • personal fulfillment
  • societal stigma
  • long-term implications
  • cultural influences
  • emotional autonomy
  • environmental sustainability
  • demographic shift
  • financial independence
  • ethical considerations
  • social consciousness
  • quality of life
  • reproductive choices
  • overpopulation concerns
  • self-actualization
  • lifestyle choice
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