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Nowadays many people prefer to use their own cars to commute rather than buses and trains. Why do you think this is happening? What can the government do to change it?

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In the modern and permanently changing world, owning a car is not only a symbol of social status but rather more a necessity for
people
 who want to be at work and at home on time.
Moreover
, the existing
problems
 with public
transport
 don’t let the majority of
people
 refuse to commute by cars. I will try to unveil some of these
problems
 in my essay.
To begin
 with, there are several predominant factors forcing
people
 to prefer their own conveyance rather than buses and trains.
First
 and foremost, many
people
 find it convenient and comfortable to commute with their families as compared to public transit. As it often happens, the buses are too overcrowded during peak hours.
Furthermore
, most buses are equipped with diesel engines and it is uncomfortable for passengers to feel
traffic
 fumes inside when the bus is standing with a working engine, particularly for persons who have chronic diseases and children.
Besides
, the journey by car is much more flexible and free than to other types of
transport
.
People
 can stop and take breaks at any place as well as at any point of time suitable to them.
However
,
on the other hand
, humanity has already faced congested
traffic
problems
 in the megalopolises. Nowadays, entry into the town centre is prohibited for cars in many big cities due to
traffic
problems
.
Traffic
 jams became a day-to-day problem for
people
 living in urban areas. Solving these issues is impossible without developing and modernising the public
transport
 network.
Additionally
, the government should create conditions for widespread
such
 modes of individual
transport
 as bicycles and electric scooters. In conclusion,
although
 many
people
 prefer to travel by their own car ,for now, patterns of urban development more likely will lead to expulsion the cars out from the cities in the near future.
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