Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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sky diving and skiing
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be banned.I
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life
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banned sky diving and skiing due to younger people are most interested to take
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younger
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to show friends how to be sky diving and
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just try it that time they take risk in our
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concentrate
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sport activities effects on
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dangerous
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banned its
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to improve their
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.Government should have to do some other
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introduces because they help to develop
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in other
games
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sports
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spots
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such
as cricket and football.tennis,
bedminton
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badminton
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helps to take interest in these
games
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shold
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should
take steps to banned some
sports
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harmful
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their our.
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  • thrill-seeking behavior
  • protective gear
  • extreme athleticism
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