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Online education is rapidly increasing in popularity. What has led to this development? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online learning compared to in-class instructions? Provide examples and explanations.

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Issues related to online
education
 are frequently discussed these days. It is true that
study
 online has hugely grown over the recent years. The causes of learning, as well as both sides of view, will be discussed in the following paragraphs. As for the
first
 question, thanks to the rapid development of technologies,
such
 as computers and the internet, it offers humans to adapt their livings to be easier than before. So,
study
 online is one of the benefits of upcoming technologies. Regarding the
second
 question, on the one hand, there are several merits of online learning. The principal reason is that online courses offer
education
 in a flexible way in terms of places and times.
This
 means that students can learn from any sites of the world where the internet accesses.
Moreover
, pupils have greatly reduced the
education
 cost including transportations and accommodation due to
study
 from their hometowns.
For instance
, nowadays, the young living in Thailand can
study
 Master Degree with Professors in London Business School through online courses and have certificates later.
On the other hand
, there are a variety of demerits associated with online courses. The main reason is that people may not have a great opportunity for face-to-face activities. Generally, having experiences with peers in the university is the best opportunity in campus’s life.
Besides
, some people, especially children, often lack the concentration of the lesson when they have to learn on the computer all day. To exemplify, most parents in Thailand have to teach their offspring by themselves since their children cannot focus on the teacher talking through the tablet. All things considered, I am of the opinion that the benefits of increasing online
education
 in academics significantly outweigh the drawbacks.
Therefore
,
study
 online should be carefully realized and supported by individuals and governments in many aspects.
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