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Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, the trend has been increased towards international trade. A section of the society thought that the modern technologies increased our dependence on others
although
 others argue that it gives us more freedom. I strongly believe that it creates more dependency on others. In the course of the essay, I will discuss both sides.
To begin
 with, those people arguments who believe that it reduces our freedom. Before
this
 new innovation in the modern world when travelling is a big issue from one
country
 to other countries
country
 At that time most of the necessaries are made in the
country
 which gives us more economic benefit to locals. Even these days our demand has been on that stage when a
country
 gives dictations.
For example
, most of the energy requirements are based on oil and the oil import from the UAE and if they stop producing oil
then
 our system will fail. On the other side of people that think modern innovation helps us to decrease dependence. These technologies give us alternative methods to get things which previously depend on other countries.
For instance
 that some regions are not able to use their land for agriculture purposes but nowadays a plethora of new methods make that land accurate agriculture. Recently, cities are dependent on the villages to fulfil food requirements but now cities can produce food and vegetables in vertical forming. In my, opinion these things happen
also
 in the early ages due to the fact
this
 world always needs a number of things from other regions. In conclusion, modern innovations increase demand for products from other countries
although
 some products are decreased.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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