Gone are the days when children dreamed of becoming doctors and nurses – today’s children want to become YouTubers or vloggers. According to a survey of 1,000 children aged six to 17, more than three quarters of them say they’d consider a career in online videos. It is dangerous for kids to aspire to become a YouTube sensation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has always been one of the cliches to ask children which career they

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to pick when they become an adult. With the growth of social

media

, many youngsters crave to be bloggers or YouTubers. Despite all the advantages

media

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us, parents cannot still trust

such

platforms and they assume being fully occupied with the virtual world could do them harm and cannot be considered as a suitable job. I personally agree to some extent.

To begin

with, it must be indicated that

media

fever has been spread

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widely that no one can deny its effect on our routine life. The youth are not an exception to that either, the more they see bloggers and their fancy lives, the thirstier they become to be one of them. Suppose you are a teenager and your device is filled with videos that tell you being wealthy needs no hard work or high levels of education. All you need is to be familiar with some applications and how to post online and gain followers. Soon you will be considered rich and popular. With that in mind, most children see no

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in educating and bearing with hardships.

Hence

,

that is

when they decide to gain it all over a night

instead

of trying harder to achieve fame and wealth. Another example could be nowadays challenges which are becoming contagious. They post the most personal stuff online without considering how dangerous it can be for their safety.

Additionally

, it must not be left unsaid that the more they are drawn into

this

, the less creative they become. Not only have they no innovation

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making those videos, but they

also

just copy and follow up some patterns without knowing why or how the original pattern was made.

However

, sometimes some teenagers would use these platforms to make useful context,

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most of them are just going down the same path other bloggers have gone.

Moreover

, after a period they would go down the hill and their fame would fade away soon. A tangible example of that would

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Youtubers who became famous in the blink of an eye but their popularity did not

last

for so long.

To sum up

, it should not be forgotten that

although

media

has made our lives more convenient in

many

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numerous ways, it still has its own drawbacks. Our youngsters must learn that utilizing modern platforms

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beneficial, as long as we do not over-use or

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them.