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some people believe that the salaries paid to professional sportspeople is too high, while others argue that sports salaries are fair. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Huge pay-packets for professional sportspeople have become an argument between various groups. Some
people
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 believe that their pay is disproportionately high and
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 discrepancy is not fair, while others believe the opposite.
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 essay tends to discuss both viewpoints. Some
people
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, including many middle-classes, think that the fat pay for professional athletes is not reasonable. I think the main reason behind
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 opinion is that they think
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 high payment may fuel the widening gap between different social classes, which ultimately leads to an unequal society.
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, they think that there are various
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 who play more beneficial roles in
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society than professional athletes are not as beneficial and if anyone has to be paid a huge
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 of
money
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, they should be those who have more contribution to
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society,
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 as teachers, civil servants or nurses.
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, some
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, including me, believe that sportsmen and women deserve a substantial
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 of
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. The main reason behind
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 viewpoint is that their work-life is short-lived. Considering a soccer player as an example, many start their professional career at age 18 and would retire at age 35.
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, their work-life is surprisingly limited and they have to spend the
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 they earned during
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 time for the rest of their life.
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, they go under rigorous training which makes them more prone to physical accidents from which they might suffer for the rest of their life. So the payments for these
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 should be taken as
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insurance for the rest of their life. In conclusion, there are different attributes among
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 about the earnings of sportspeople.
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 some take a position in
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 of the considerable
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 of
money
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 they earn, others take a position against it and believe that
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amount
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 paid is not reasonable.
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, I take a position with the latter view and believe that they deserve
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money
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