Air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world. Ordinary people can not get any advantage with the development of air travel. To what extent do agree or disagree?

Nowadays, most
of
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the
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people
especially the gifted ones can
travel
to some part of the
world
. While some ordinary habitats are still hoping that someday when they get permanent
work
again they can
travel
outside the country. I firmly believe the richest
people
can
travel
anytime they wanted.
First
of all, wealthy
people
always have the advantage to go around the
world
when they got bored or just to have fun.
For example
, the artist in the Philippines usually wanted to go to beaches in Thailand or Maldives. They earning a lot
that is
why travelling can ease their stress about
work
and help them to recharge after a year of just working and sleepless nights.
Thus
, going around the
world
or spending
money
is not a big issue to them as long as they are happy with it.
On the other hand
, average
people
cannot afford to visit the outside
world
because regardless of
this
pandemic. Most of them want to buy food or other essentials that they earned from
work
rather than spend it for just fun.
For instance
, my batchmate when I was in high school is suffering from depression today because she lost her one and only job that can help her family in
this
time of the pandemic. She loves to
travel
outside the country but she realized that spending too much
money
is not reliable as she's just
ordinary
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person who
need
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to spend
money
on the most important things. To conclude, travelling using air
travel
is exciting and memorable to everyone but not all can afford it. Having stable
work
to provide for all the needs of their family is the most important.
Thus
, if your status in life is not like just ordinary and you don't know where to spend all your
money
, travelling is your choice.
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  • accessible
  • democratised
  • low-cost carriers
  • budget airlines
  • globalization
  • international trade
  • luxury experiences
  • affordable flights
  • cultural exchange
  • environmental impact
  • eco-friendly
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