Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as learning tool, which is why children are less educated today. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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of learning can not replace paper format.

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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as learning tool, which is why children are less educated today. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

These days many parents want their children to study a second language such as English. Do you think it is important for younger children to study a new language? Do you think schools should teach every student in primary school a second language?

Some children spend hours everyday on their smartphones. What is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative developmnet?

It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should only focus on people in their own countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The natural resources such as oil, and fresh water are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause? How can we solve these problems?