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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?

#nations #countries #relief #disasters
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It is argued that developing
countries
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 should be helped by developed
nations
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 during natural calamities. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 statement because rich
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 have a surplus of
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 at their disposal, and they can reap the rewards of goodwill in future. Developed
countries
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 should help poor
nations
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 in the event of natural disasters as they have plenty of
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 to divert during
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 crises. Most of the developed
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 have a surplus of cash owing to higher per capita income and their own requirement for
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 can easily be met, despite them using part of their wealth for humanitarian work.
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, many natural
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 as grains or milk products are perishable in nature, which can aptly be used in the beginning. A recent study has shown that the altruistic work done by the United
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 during the Tsunami waves in Indonesia helped in the survival of more than 2.3 million people. Developed
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 should extend help to under-developed
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 during exigencies as tables can turn at any time. As evident in past, poor
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 can become rich and rich
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 can fall into poverty too.
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, even the rich
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 might have requirements of scarce
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, which only some poor
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 have in abundance.
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, during the Covid-19 pandemic, India became the largest manufacturer and supplier of life-saver vaccines, and these vaccines were distributed to the developed
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 too. To conclude,
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 believe that, under-developed
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 should get assistance from wealthy
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 since developed
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 have more than what they need and even they might need help in future as their own situation may change with time.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Humanitarian relief
  • Infrastructure
  • Global solidarity
  • Disproportionately
  • External assistance
  • Rebuilding efforts
  • Disaster response
  • Investment in stability
  • Dependency theory
  • Responsible intervention
  • Paternalistic
  • Shared humanity
  • Sovereignty
  • Capabilities
  • Fatality rates
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