At the present time, the population of some countries include relative large numbers of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give the reasons for your answer and include any relative examples from your own knowledge or experiences.

I am a very organized person, so one thing that was really challenging for me in the past was when I lived with my
brother
while we were both attending college. I love my
brother
, but he is not an organized person, so living with him as a roommate was tough. The way I overcame
this
challenge was
first
by having a heart-to-heart with my
brother
. I told him it bothered me when he put dishes away in random cupboards rather than following the organizational system I had created. I keep different types of dishes in different cupboards;
otherwise
, I can never find anything. At
first
, I was worried my
brother
would think I was overreacting for bringing
this
up, but he didn’t. I think it’s because I explained why it bothers me that he would randomly put things away: it confused me, and it took extra
time
to find anything. I even added that if my tasks were streamlined and took less
time
, that would mean I would have more
time
to spend with him, my beloved
brother
! I think putting a positive spin on things always helps. I like to compliment someone,
then
criticism,
then
another compliment. If you give criticism, sometimes people do not react well, and the problem only becomes worse because they refuse to see your side of it. So, my people skills and communication skills helped me overcome
this
challenge. I
also
showed my
brother
what the inside of my dresser drawers and my closet looked like. I explained the logic behind each organizational choice and pointed out that it did not take me very long to find a specific outfit.
In contrast
, it took him a very long
time
to find his favourite clothing items because they were always on the floor, on a chair, or shoved into a random place in the closet. My
brother
may not have re-organized his own closet, but he did agree to follow the organizational system I had created for the spaces we shared, including the kitchen.
This
made my life less stressful, and I think it saved us both
time
in the end! Plus, my
brother
wasn’t mad at me for sharing my concerns because I did it cordially and professionally.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic trend
  • economic development
  • workforce dynamics
  • social innovation
  • healthcare allocation
  • education and skills development
  • employment challenges
  • economic instability
  • resource management
  • aging population
  • cultural and societal shifts
  • generational conflicts
  • global competitiveness
  • progressive changes
  • technological advancements
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