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Many people today are choosing to live and work in another country after graduating from university in their home country. Why is this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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 map of the Grange park has been illustrated by the given diagrams as compares to the 1920’s blueprint, which is for the inhabitants. Overall, there are a number of changes
took
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 place in the current planning, along with new constructions and demolishes of some old features. The north and south entrances remain unchanged, but
introduction
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 of
a
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 underground entrance with
car
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a car
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 parking facility has been displayed in the extreme
south-east
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southeast
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 corner. In fact, at
this
 location glasshouse have
replaced
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 with a water reservoir. On the
north-east
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northeast
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 section, a pond having aquatic plants have
altered
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 with a play area for the children. Whereas, on the left side, a cafe has been built up in place of
rose
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the rose
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 garden. In the middle part of the park, there is a
square shaped
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 rose garden with benches
in
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 all four sides in the new map
instead
 of a fountain. Earlier there used to be a stage in the
north-west
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northwest
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 section, but recently amphitheatre has been constructed for concerts.
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, the rose garden and sitting arrangements in the southern segment is being taken down.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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