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Some people argue that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure high paying jobs while other believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is asserted that few individuals that well qualification is the gateway to have lucrative
jobs
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 while others say that work is the main reason for well- paying job .I completely concur with the notion that knowledge of work will lead to high paying
jobs
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This
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 essay will discuss both views
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 with ,skilled persons are great
trouble
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troubleshooter
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shooter
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 due to their experience in a particular field which helps in the smooth functioning of an organization. Apart from
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 they have well established cordial relationship with their clients due to commendable services offered by them and it is fact that good relations with the clients always make the reputation of a company better .
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,
well -experienced
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well-experienced
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 employees
have
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 innovative ideas
helps
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that helps
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 to think differently in a positive manner which is ultimately going to benefit the workplace.
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 one of my friends has been retained by his company again after his retirement due to his knowledge and practical skills.
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, it is reckoned by few individuals that the people with academic brilliance should be prioritized for lucrative
jobs
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 .many educational institutes evidence the best level of training
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 students for their careers .It makes them qualify for better
jobs
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 or higher pay
jobs
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 .Now the practical training during the internship program
are
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 designed in
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 a way that it meets the current level of requirements in the companies .
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, through their theoretical ,knowledge they understand the task better and it can be applied in their area of performance.
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, medical students during their internship program understand the patient problem and diagnosis of the disease which helps them in the future In conclusion, problem-solving skills, new ideas and relationship with customers of the well-experienced employees is the potential source to get high paying
jobs
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, in my
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 experience makes the person valuable to
company
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the company
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 for certain
jobs
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