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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps depict the directional path of a
city
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 hospital starting from the
city
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road
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 in two different years.
Overall
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, the position of
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city
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the city
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 hospital remains unchanged which is surrounded by the ring
road
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.
However
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, the remaining changes are distinct in both years. In 2007, the entrance to
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city
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the city
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 hospital from the
city
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road
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 is quite simple. Moving towards the path of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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, there are three equivalent pairs of bus stoppage symbols. On the right side of the hospital
road
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, there is a space for
car
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a car
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 park for the local people. In 2010, the entrance to the
city
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 hospital is far different from
previous
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the previous
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 version. There are two roundabouts on the way to the hospital
road
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. We can see
few
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a few
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 changes made in 2010. There are additional parts of
bus
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the bus
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 station and staff car park on both sides of the hospital
road
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. There is a public car space available on the right side of the
city
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 hospital.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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