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With all the troubles in the world today, money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other things.

#troubles #world #money #space #exploration #waste
Science
 is not a thing that can be done away with. It is the observation and study of the world around us. The Scientific method is just observing and studying in a way that minimizes bias and error. I suppose you could abolish the Scientific Method if you really tried, but as long as people are asking
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 and trying to understand the nature around them, as long as someone is curious or asks why something is the way it is,
science
 will exist.
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 is the inevitable
result
 of asking questions about the world. Just by asking
this
 question, you have kicked off
science
.
Science
 is the
result
 of curiosity, and I don’t know that you could argue that we don’t need to be curious. Certainly, life would be boring without it.
Thus
 , human being keeps evolving by asking questions . The journey has been long, Cave Man learnt various skills and techniques to survive and become self-sufficient . Humans kept discovering and creating which led to Industrial Revolution . The
result
 is that currently
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we are in Cyber Age . Life is harsh , but with the help
from
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 modern
science
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 man has conquered many frontiers.
Science
 has become a part of our lives and without
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 we risk extinction ,human
being
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need to develop positively and during our century it is only possible with
Science
. Ultimately,
science
 is not a need,
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 the inevitable
result
 of the questions about the world around us.
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  • terrestrial issues
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  • living standards
  • reallocate
  • long-term benefits
  • urgent social issues
  • practical applications
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  • financial burden
  • public and private partnerships
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