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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

#government #money #life #planets #people
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A lot of the
government
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's spending is on the NASA program to look for alternate planets to see whether they will support
life
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.
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 is more of a divided opinion, as many believe that the
government
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 is wasting time rather than solving the current problems on
earth
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, whilst others feel it is necessary for human survival. In my opinion, I feel the
government
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 must spend on
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 cause, I shall substantiate my reasons in
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 essay. On one hand, the current global warming rates have reached a limit where, it is now of utmost importance to find another planet, which can sustain
life
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 as per the atmospheric
conditions
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 of the
earth
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.
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, a recent study shows Mars is the most like to like a planet, in terms of the
earth
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's atmospheric
conditions
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, which can sustain
life
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.
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, the identification of a river system on Mars has laid claim to the fact that Mars in a way is more similar to
earth
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 as compared to any of the other planets. Alternately, the public feels that with the amount being spent on the space program to find
life
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 on other planets, that money could be spent on providing better healthcare to its citizens, trying to eradicate poverty, improve the educational and infrastructural systems, and most important to stop unemployment amongst the middle-class citizens.
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, the spending budget of NASA on average runs into the billions, which is used for other purposes, could drastically improve the living
conditions
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 of the people. In conclusion, I feel it is very important for the
government
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 to be spending on their science program, because due to the increase in global warming on
earth
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, the
conditions
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 are slowly becoming inhabitable and
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 it is necessary to find an alternate planet which would be able to support
life
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, for the continuation of the human race.
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