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Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that economically advanced
countries
 ought to have more
refugees
 and are responsible to supply them with food and location.
This
 essay strongly disagrees with
this
 view because
countries
 must solve the problems of their inhabitants
first
. Compelling arguments can be made that
refugees
 face many challenges when they move to a new
country
.
For example
, they are incapable to contact with citizens.
As a result
, it is very difficult for
refugees
 to find employment and
consequently
, they commit many crimes to save their lives
such
 as robbery, thief, burglar.
That is
 why many
countries
 do not open their doors to
refugees
. Especially, nowadays, many
countries
 have not allowed Afghan
refugees
 into the
country
 since the Taliban invaded Afghanistan namely Poland, Hungary and the Czech Republic. These
countries
 have scarcely received many
refugees
 at all. It may be tempting to argue that rich
countries
 should allow
refugees
 in order to survive in the
country
. A few
countries
 are bearing almost all the responsibility. Over 20 million
refugees
 have been granted protection in another
country
 in the past ten years. While
countries
such
 as Lebanon, Uganda and Sweden have received large numbers of
refugees
 year after year. Several of these are rich and populous
countries
 that are much more able to help to provide food and shelter In conclusion, wealthier nations should not take more
refugees
 due to saving their lives.
Although
 immigrants are coming from Syria and Iraq, they may be terrorists.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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