Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while, others think that it is dangerous and unhealthy which opinion do you agree with. Discuss both options and give example.

Several human beings assume that taking care of home
animals
is satisfactory for kids while others believe it is threatening and unsafe.In
this
essay,I will elaborate
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views and give my opinion
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this
topic.
To begin
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people decide to take
animals
for innumerable reasons.One of them is that most of the civilization is fascinated with them.
Pets
give love to their owners.Recent studies
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shown that it is good for younger human beings to grow up around home
animals
,
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because they learn how to give and share happiness together.Taking care of them,feeding them give kids
resposibility
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responsibility
and ownership. The primary reason for individuals to consider household
animals
as a threat is their aggressive behaviour.
That is
to say,
children
below five years do not know how to handle pet
animals
, and may provoke them by treating them roughly.
For example
,
children
may
beat
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the
pets
or chew their ears.
This
causes a pet to become angry and attack young ones.
Additionally
, household
pets
may spread diseases like allergies and food poisoning because they carry dirt
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contains various bacteria, pathogens and
virus
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.
However
, a little bit of parental supervision is more than enough to take care of these problems. Parents should never leave very young
children
alone with the pet. It is
also
important to groom the
pets
properly so that they do not carry pathogens. In
conclusion
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having
a
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household
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animals
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has both sides of a coin,human beings should consider the age of the
children
etc.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • responsibility
  • care
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • social skills
  • transmit
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  • allergies
  • safety risks
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