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Some people believe that women should stay at home and should take care of children, while others believe that women should work. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #women #home #care #children #work
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whether
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women
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 should stay at
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 and take
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 of
children
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 or they should
work
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 is always a controversial one.
Women
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 opting to
work
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 or staying
home
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 to
care
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 for
children
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,
both
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 have their advantages and disadvantages.
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both
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point
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 of
views
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view
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 and provide an opinion. In
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today's
today
todays
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 modern world, more
women
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 with
children
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 are choosing to balance their
career
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careers
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 and family.
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 will help them to be independent and empowered. It
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assist
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 families financially and allows their
children
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 to study in premier educational institutions. Based on the recent study conducted by the Harvard
Universtiy
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University
 it can be noted that families with
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 working parents are able to
acheive
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achieve
 stability and happiness. Along
supporting
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 their families financially, working
women
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 can utilize the knowledge and
decision making
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 capabilities from their careers to model their
children
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 into mature adults.
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, some people argue that
women
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 should stay at
home
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 as it is very important to take
care
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 of the
children
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untill
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until
 they complete their adolescence. With the recent social media changes it has become very hard to keep track of
the
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what
children
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 are
upto
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up to
 and it
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 has become very easy for
children
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 to fall into dangerous
ptitfalls
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pitfalls
 like drugs, alcohol etc.
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, in a recent study on
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school going teenagers in
USA
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, it came to light that 45% of them
atleast
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at least
 once used harmful substances like marijuana.
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whether the amount of adult supervision these
children
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 are receiving is enough?.
Children
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 are the future of any country and they should be protected from harmful forces in
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society.
Women
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, given their nurturing and maternal characteristics, should stay at
home
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 to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 the
responsibiltiy
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responsibility
responsibilities
 of taking
care
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 of the
children
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 and raise them as responsible adults. In conclusion, some
women
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 choose to
work
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 and some opt to
be stay
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home
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 mothers.
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both
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point
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 of
views
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view
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 and explained the reasons for respective views including financial stability and adult supervision. In my opinion, society should leave it to every
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women
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woman
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 whether they want to stay
home
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 taking
care
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 of the
children
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 or they want to go to
work
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.
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