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Some people think that the only way to be successful in business is to have a unique product.discuss if you agree or disagree.

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It is often considered by some in society that only those who market a different product from others can become successful in their trade.I completely concur with the notion to a greater extent .
This
 essay will discuss how a unique product is best for a business in the
first
 paragraph and in the
second
 half will discuss its other side.
To begin
 with, the business world is becoming increasingly competitive.There is cut-throat competition in retail so the best way to attract customers is to launch a unique item.Entrepreneurs hire celebrities for the advertisement of their products
furthermore
 product packaging is
also
 done in a beautiful way which encourages people to buy and use those items ,
for example
, film actor Salman Khan is the brand ambassador of Coca-Cola company due to which there was a drastic growth in their sales. On the flip side, the financial risk increases to launch a different brand. The company has to spend advertisement expenses for the promotion
also
 it requires huge investment to attract the customers so the companies which can make huge investments create a Monopoly due to which other business person will suffer losses and it
also
 makes the price of a commodity higher in the Market. For ,example due to the outlets of big basket brands,small shopkeepers have suffered. To conclude, due to increasing competition in the market different products is the necessity of competitors
although
 it requires a lot of investment
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