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Using a smartphone to make calls, send and receive emails, access the internet, and so on, has become an essential part of many people's lives. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Technology impacts daily life and it has changed the ways of communication between
people
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. Nowadays, most individuals own a smartphone in which they are available to connect through phone calls, emails, and much more if they have wi-fi near. In my opinion, I completely agree with the position of advantages surpassing the disadvantages of using a smartphone. Regarding
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the numerous benefits, the main one is the possibility to communicate with
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 around the world: family, friends, coworkers, clients. There is no person without a relative living in a different country than their so that the opportunity of being in touch
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 the distance, has been a gamechanger for families compared to the time in which
smartphones
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 were not on the radar. During the pandemic,
smartphones
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 were crucial to socialized while lockdown was instituted around the whole world.
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, remote work is now a tendency
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 pandemic is controlled,
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smartphones
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 let
people
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 be aware of what is happening in their jobs.
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, I work remotely, but
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 cook and raise a daughter; I would not be able to complete my responsibilities without my cellphone. It cannot be denied that face-to-face communication is missing importance, especially for young
people
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 that on several occasions prioritizes internet connection over a family dinner, or kids cry to watch their youtube videos on the smartphone.
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, those are periods of life, and the parent's role is to manage these situations. The benefits and drawbacks of the use of
smartphones
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 have been described through
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 essay, and I believe that the advantages outnumbered the disadvantages for an individual's life

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