Topic: The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars ?

Increasing usage of motor vehicles
are
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creating
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of issues.
Although
, it produces more pollution and traffic congestions, in order to mitigate the
problem
, the government need to take adequate efforts which I will discuss in the forthcoming paragraphs. There
are
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numerous
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that occurred due to
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of
cars
.
Firstly
,
air
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pollution level is increasing day by day because every person
prefer
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to travel by their own car, which produces chemical fumes into
air
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and
harmful
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for
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environment as well as for the individuals.
Secondly
, traffic congestion is
also
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issue faced by the population,
people
unable to reach
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their destination at
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, they
stuck
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in the traffic for many hours, which tends to
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of time.
In addition
to
this
, it ruins the natural fuels, because the consumption is more and supply is less. In order to solve the
problem
, authorities need to discourage
people
to avoid
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the use
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of
cars
. If government
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improves
the
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public transportation , make them more convenient and
easily
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availability
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,
then
people
would prefer to travel by public transportation
instead
of their personal vehicles.
Also
,
people
should make aware
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the side effects of using
cars
, so that they can understand their responsibility
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an
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environmental
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.
In addition
to
this
,
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regime should impose
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tax on buying
cars
, it not only reduces the purchase of
cars
,
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but
also
, decline
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usage. To conclude, while there
are
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a lot of
problem
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problems
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that
caused
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are caused
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by
usage
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the usage
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of
cars
such
as, environmental issues and an extension of natural resources;
however
,
people
can be discouraged by government actions .
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