Topic: The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars ?

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Increasing usage of motor vehicles

are

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creating

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of issues.

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, it produces more pollution and traffic congestions, in order to mitigate the

problem

, the government need to take adequate efforts which I will discuss in the forthcoming paragraphs. There

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numerous

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that occurred due to

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cars

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pollution level is increasing day by day because every person

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to travel by their own car, which produces chemical fumes into

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environment as well as for the individuals.

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, traffic congestion is

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issue faced by the population,

people

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their destination at

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, they

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in the traffic for many hours, which tends to

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of time.

In addition

this

, it ruins the natural fuels, because the consumption is more and supply is less. In order to solve the

problem

, authorities need to discourage

people

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cars

. If government

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improves

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public transportation , make them more convenient and

easily

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availability

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then

people

would prefer to travel by public transportation

instead

of their personal vehicles.

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people

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the side effects of using

cars

, so that they can understand their responsibility

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environmental

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regime should impose

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tax on buying

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, it not only reduces the purchase of

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but

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, decline

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usage. To conclude, while there

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a lot of

problem

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that

caused

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usage

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cars

such

as, environmental issues and an extension of natural resources;

however

people

can be discouraged by government actions .

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Topic: The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars ?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In many counties are investing in new technology to deal with public. Why is this happening? Do you think it is an appropriate use of government money?

In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are a important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?