In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions?

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One of the highly controversial issues today relates to politics. In several nations,
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not participate in a vote. In
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essay, I will explain the reason for
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issues
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and suggest possible solutions to alleviate
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. There are several reasons why the younger people have less time to elect.
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, they
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not have to take care of
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politics.
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society is peaceful.
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, if the country is likely to occur a war or strike, civilians must watch their country’s
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through TV or newspaper.
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, voters tend to propose
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discipline for elder people. A number of countries,
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have a population of few younger people problem. As for
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elected person implies the new rules shush as increasing pension and supporting daycare house for the old generation. A possible solution to these matters would be two ideas.
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with, the government use an advertisement
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SNS. Younger ones always look at
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smartphone
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.
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, Instagram, Youtube and Facebook.
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, the minister
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effect
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viewers and they know when we should go vote.
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, the candidates have to make a policy not only older but
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younger.
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, they provide
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free education system until
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university. To sum up, there are some causes that they do not interested in local
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and candidates encourage
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ideas for
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. Whereas
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the administration utilizes social network services and the
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person imposes the new suggestion for
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generation, these explanations might deal with these problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratic process
  • political instability
  • skewed representation
  • governance
  • erosion
  • civic education
  • alienation
  • policy-making
  • accessible
  • incentives
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