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Many people believe that the social networking sites have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extend do you agree?

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Social networking
sites
 ,
for
instance
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 Facebook , are thought to have caused detrimental impacts on
individuals
, society & local
communities
 by few
people
 in the society.
However
, while I believe that these
sites
 are beneficial for the
individuals
, I agree that they have had a damaging effect on the culture of local
communities
. With regards to
individuals
, the impact social media
sites
 have had on each individual person has clear advantages.
Firstly
,
people
 from different countries are brought together on a common platform through
such
sites
 whereas ,before the development of technology and social networking
sites
 ,
people
 rarely had a chance to meet or communicate with
people
 outside their immediate circle or local community.
Secondly
, Facebook
also
 has social groups which offer
individuals
 a chance to meet and participate in discussions with
people
 who share common interests.
On the other hand
, the effect Facebook and other social networking
sites
 have had on society and local
communities
 can only be seen as negative. Rather than participating in local community discussions,
individuals
 started to prefer communicating with
people
 online.
Consequently
, the bond between
people
 in local
communities
 has weakened.
Furthermore
, the local societies have become disjointed and fragmented as
people
 started to spend more time online with
people
 whom they have never met and are very less likely to meet in future. To conclude, though social networking
sites
 are beneficial for
individuals
 to connect with
people
 across the world and participate in discussions related to their common interests, they have had negative effects on societies and local
communities
 as
people
 no longer show interest to meet directly. Local
communities
 should do something different about
this
 to break
this
 trend and encourage
people
 to gather together again to promote the future of community life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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