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Nowadays many people have an unhealthy diet and do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons behind this trend? How can we encourage these people to live a healthy lifestyle?

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In the contemporary era, many individuals have an unhealthy lifestyle due to consuming
foods
 that are fruitless for their bodies and the lack of enough physical activities.
This
 essay will address
this
 issue by giving the reasons and motivation for
this
 phenomenon.
To begin
 with, there are some reasons behind the tendency to an unhealthy lifestyle.
Firstly
, all walks of life have a busy schedule and they are immersed in preoccupations so they do not have enough time to cook. They just want to opt for the convenience
foods
 like fast
foods
, greasy
foods
, or some prepared ones containing unhealthy ingredients.
This
 is why nowadays; the consumption of junk
foods
 has been increasing.
Furthermore
, the ubiquity of fast food tempts
people
 to buy them even if they are not hungry.
Secondly
, the sedentary lifestyle makes
people
 lazier.
Hence
, if they have enough time to exercise, they will prefer to rest and take a nap. Apart from all temptations, we can take some measurements to put
people
 toward a healthy trajectory. One of the most indispensable measurements could be the beneficial programs on the internet. Nowadays, the omnipresence of the internet brings about
people
 surf on the net most of the time.
Therefore
, online programs and applications can bring a paradigm shift in their life in many ways. We can design the health applications for diet and exercise so that
people
 encourage to do them.
Besides
 it, if we design them more eye-catching the users will more inspire to carry out them. in conclusion,
although
 nowadays there are innumerable tantalizing factors which push
people
 to unhealthy lifestyles, I subscribe to the notion that we can take some fruitful steps to cope with them.
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