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Newspapers are less important nowadays because we have up-to-date access to the news on the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#newspapers #access #news #internet
With
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 increasing popularity and effectiveness, the
Internet
 finds itself being used extensively in almost every household. When it comes to accessing
news
,
majority
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the majority
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 have shifted from depending on
newspapers
 to the
Internet
, while some sections of
the
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society still stick to reading
newspapers
. Yet, most people cogitate that
newspapers
 will stay as the most prominent
news
source
.
This
 essay explores arguments strongly against
this
 idea, giving analysis as to why the
Internet
 has convincingly replaced our traditional
news
source
. An argument
which
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 can’t be ignored is how online resources
comes
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 in handy, especially in light of how busy and fast today’s world moves. The
internet
 provides huge advantages over
newspapers
 in
this
 regard.
Firstly
, the most important factors being the rate of access and variety. To explain
further
, accessing
news
 through various online
news
 apps is just one click away, whereas
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 amount of effort and time goes into going and buying
newspapers
 from vendors. Apart from
this
, we get colossal, inexhaustive amounts of information on online websites, which is not the case with
newspapers
. They may provide plentiful information about what is happening in various fields, but
eventually
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 it’s limited to 10 to 15 pages. For these reasons,
public
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 is preferring the new technology over the conventional for following up
news
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. Another argument to be made in favour of
this
 growing online
source
,
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 is
it’s
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 compatibility with the new age culture. Often, the youth and adults find the way
news
being
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 presented on
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the website
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website
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 more riveting. Blogs, articles and other online content are often presenting
news
 with alluring pictures related. For
this
reason
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 as well, more and more people every day are turning towards websites,
news
 content apps etc. to get their daily
news
 feed. In conclusion, considering the given above reasons, the
internet
 is helping people get their mundane knowledge effectively and convincingly. So saying that
newspapers
 are still a pre-eminent
source
 is implausible.
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